Whiptail Acorn

[Doug535]

Finished this one up this weekend. Critique welcomed.
https://imgur.com/a/4tkDwVt

[JMG]

The stummel is pretty solid. Nice job. I think the stem would be better if its flare followed the curve of the end of the shank. Also, the blade could be thinned down yet. Specifically the underneath side could lose some material to give it better lines.

[sandahlpipe]

I'm not convinced of a few design choices you made. They're not wrong per se, they just lack cohesion in the overall composition.

1. The angle of the stem in relation to the shank.
2. The bead or flare of the stem, both size and angles and roundness
3. The thickness of the stem towards the saddle/flare on the profile view.
4. The length of the stem in relationship to the whole.

So the next step for you is to use repetition to bring the design of the stem into the stummel or vice-versa. You can repeat the length of a shank or bowl line, the curve of the swoop, etc. You want someone who picks up the pipe to not feel like he could just take the stem off another pipe and use that instead.

[Doug535]

Thanks John and Jeremiah. So Jeremiah, in your opinion should I have angled the stem more up?

[sandahlpipe]

Yes. Take a step back and look at which angle the bulk of the shank is pointing towards and have the stem continue that line. It’s harder to define with a whip tail like that, but the overall composition should guide the stem, so looking at it further away will help.


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